Save the Bachelor of Heaven

The political commissar was at a loss for words.

His education level is not high, although he can detect the flaws in the script, but he can't see through the flaws.

He thought for a long time, and finally said, "You have all watched "Taking Tiger Mountain Out of Wisdom", "Surprise Attack on the White Tiger Regiment", and "Shajiabang", how do you feel?"

"It looks good, of course it looks good." Everyone nodded.

"When you watched it for the first time, didn't you finish one episode and then just want to watch the next one, and don't want to leave until you finish it?" the political commissar asked again.

Everyone nodded again.

"Taking Tiger Mountain Out of Wisdom", "Surprise Attack on the White Tiger Regiment", "Shajiabang" and other dramas, the enemies are insidious and cunning, the situation is intricate and exciting, even if they have watched it many times and are familiar with the plot, they still act at those joints. Will squeeze a sweat. Worried about the protagonist, cursed the villain to be unlucky, and refused to leave until he saw the final victory.

"Our script lacks the power to catch people." The political commissar said immediately, "Let people watch the first scene and not be interested in watching the second scene."

Xiao Suizi, Hao Shuwen, Zhu Ke, and Chen Can were all quite disappointed when they heard this.

They all thought the script was pretty good, the characters were real, the story was touching, and it showed the deeds of the heroes and models well, and they didn't understand what the political commissar was not satisfied with.

"Why, is this discouraging?" The political commissar said displeased when he saw it, "Which of those successful works was not written and rewritten, revised and revised, and finally polished. You failed once, and that's all." Looks like this, do you still have any fighting spirit?!"

"Political Commissar, let's take it back and change it." Hao Shuwen had no choice but to say, but she had no idea how to change it.

"Hmm." The political commissar nodded.

...

After getting back the script and returning to the creation room, several people looked at each other in blank dismay, all at a loss.

"I think this script is pretty good, how should I change it?" Hao Shuwen frowned and said, "Xiao Suizi, do you have any ideas?"

"I want to make up my mind, I've said it long ago, don't wait now." Xiao Suizi waved his hand.

"Chen Can, Zhu Ke, how about you two?" Hao Shuwen asked again.

Chen Can and Zhu Ke also shook their heads.

"I knew I couldn't point to you." Hao Shuwen curled her lips and said, "Liu Feng, what do you think?"

"I just have a little vague idea, very immature, I didn't say it before." Xiang Nan said modestly.

"Let's talk about immaturity, we don't have anything yet." Hao Shuwen immediately asked for advice.

"Yeah, immaturity is better than nothing." Xiao Suizi also echoed.

"Let's talk about it, no matter how immature it is, it's still an idea." Chen Can also said, "Bring it out, let's discuss it, maybe it will work out."

"That's right, if the script is not well written, everyone will lose face, so don't be too cautious." Zhu Ke also said, and he pointed to it to make meritorious service.

"Then I'll just talk about it briefly." Xiang Nan nodded, "The political commissar is right, our script is immature, it just moves the deeds of the heroes and models onto the stage without any in-depth artistic processing.

Moreover, one scene has one story, five scenes have five stories, and there is no connection between them. Not to mention ambushes and knots, which made the audience have no desire to continue watching.

And like "Surprise Attack on the White Tiger Group" and "Take the Tiger Mountain by Outsmart", the scenes are connected together, and there are buttons at the end of each scene, which makes the audience have to look down. "

Hearing what he said, everyone nodded.

The fault Xiang Nan mentioned does exist objectively.

They are writing scripts for the first time and have little creative experience. Therefore, the deeds of heroes and models were put on the screen in a complete manner, and a scene was reproduced.

There is no artistic processing, no characterization, no story arrangement, it is actually very boring. However, their art appreciation level is low, so they don't see it, but think that their writing is very good.

"Then how do you think it should be changed?" Xiao Suizi asked.

"I think we should change it like this..." Xiang Nan smiled, and then put forward his own ideas.

...

Xiang Nan's idea is that the protagonists are two people, one is a recruit who has just joined the army, and the other is a veteran known as Huo Leifeng.

The recruits have just joined the army, their thinking is immature, they are lazy in training, they do not observe discipline, they lack faith, and they are selfish. As the squad leader, the veteran taught him patiently, but the recruits refused to listen and refused to change after repeated admonitions.

During a training session to throw a grenade, the recruits were irritable, made operational mistakes, and encountered danger. At the critical moment, the veteran bravely stepped forward to save him, but was injured himself.

Only then did the recruits feel remorse and went to the hospital to apologize in person. In the hospital, he was deeply touched when he saw the veterans give out their allowances to help the sick and poor patients.

Inspired by the veterans, the recruits began to reform their minds, train hard, be willing to help others, and grow into an excellent soldier. In the end, in order to protect the national property, in the duel with the gangsters, the veteran was injured and died. The recruit took over the burden of the veteran and became the new living Leifeng.

In this way, there are both dramatic conflicts, character growth, and the meaning of passing on the torch.

...

After listening to Xiang Nan's story, Hao Shuwen, Xiao Suizi, Chen Can, and Zhu Ke were all stunned, and they didn't recover for a long time.

Experts will know if there is one as soon as they make a move.

Xiang Nan's script has a beginning and an end, echoing back and forth, vivid characters, and twists and turns in the story, it is really good. Compared with their script, it is really much better.

"Liu Feng, you are really amazing, you should change your career and become a writer." Xiao Suizi said admiringly.

"Liu Feng, didn't you say that you didn't go to school, and you were blind in the army? How could you make up such a good story?" Hao Shuwen was also surprised.

Chen Can smiled mysteriously, not surprising.

He had guessed before that Liu Feng might be a child of a certain leader. In order to avoid causing unnecessary trouble, that's why she hid her name in the art troupe.

Just like him, he was a big soldier in name, but who would have thought that his father was the head of the military region. Liu Feng hid it more tightly than him before, and it is likely that his relatives have a higher status.

It's no surprise that a high-ranking kid like this can write songs and dramas.

"Don't forget, I studied art in the Bangzi Troupe before, and I don't do anything else every day." Xiang Nan smiled slightly, and made an excuse for himself, "So, I have no idea how to rehearse and act. Just be more sensitive."

"So that's the case." After hearing his explanation, everyone was not surprised.

It shouldn't be surprising to know one or two hands in the theater troupe every day. Just like those in the art troupe who pull the curtain, manage the costumes, and pipe the tools, they can sing and dance a while watching them every day.

"If you think my story is okay, then let's hurry up and write it." Xiang Nan said again.

When everyone heard this, they immediately nodded and began to write.

Because Xiang Nan had already given the outline, it was much easier to write, and the second version of the script was freshly released two days later.

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